Zonder the Dust of Now

[Pluto]

At the start of the 21st Century a blanket of despair has been cast over society. A new dawn has drawn a picture that can no longer be managed by those in power. In order to conceal the fact, a blanket has been thrown over society as a political act of containment. Keeping people confused and in the dark as to what is really going on. Values have come adrift and float away anchorless. The exhibition attempts to project a space outside the blanket. As a kind of deprogrammed zone.


This is the text for an exhibition I'm having. Can you see problems or weaknesses in it, do you have any suggestions on how I might improve it. Is the style too dry, etc. Thanks.

[The Voice of Time]

excessive metaphor. Metaphors are good, but I'd suggest you limit them so people can better understand, and faster understand, what you are getting at. Too many metaphors leaves people hanging, and people are less focused to stick to what you are saying in social circumstances (unless it's two people who know each other quite well in a conversation) than if they'd be reading it for themselves in a book for instance.

[Pluto]

Thanks, yeah maybe too many. Though I'm also wary of being too clear, too precise. Maybe a slow understanding is ok. It is not demanding you listen but sits back a bit until you are ready.

This is an updated version:

At the start of the 21st Century a blanket of despair has been cast over society. A new dawn has drawn a picture that can no longer be managed by those in power. To conceal this fact, a blanket of catastrophes has been thrown over society as a political act of containment. Keeping people confused and in the dark as to what is really going on. Values have come adrift and float away anchorless. The exhibition attempts to project a space outside the blanket. As a kind of deprogrammed zone.

[marjoramblues]

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[Pluto]

Yes it's the title of the exhibition.

[marjoramblues]

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[Pluto]

No, it's great what you say. It's good to get the feedback. Though, a dreary text is not so good. What was the cause of the text? Just seeing what's going on presently, politically, musically, culturally etc. At the start of the Century it's all come at once, war on terror, planet dying, etc. At the start of every Century there's turmoil, there should be a book where it describes the history of Century beginnings to see if a pattern emerges. Look what's on tv is enough to know that things are impossible. But the silver lining is the global protests.

What happens when I put the text in the past? It comes across as more fitting in a way, no?

At the start of the 21st Century a blanket of despair was cast over society. A new dawn drew a picture that could no longer be managed by those in power. To conceal this fact, a blanket of catastrophes was thrown over society as a political act of containment. Keeping people confused and in the dark as to what was really going on. Values came adrift and floated away anchorless. The exhibition attempted to project a space outside the blanket. As a kind of deprogrammed zone.

[Pluto]

I think I'm going to the printers with this one:

At the start of the 21st Century a blanket of despair was thrown over society. A new dawn had drawn a picture that could no longer be managed by those in power. In order to conceal this, a blanket of catastrophes had been thrown over society as a political act of containment. Keeping people confused and in the dark as to what was really going on. Values had come adrift and floated away unanchored. The exhibition Zonder the Dust of Now attempted to project a space outside the blanket, as a kind of deprogrammed zone.

[Bill Wiltrack]

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Oh, um...what's really going on?



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[Hjarloprillar]

At the start of the 21st Century a blanket of despair has been cast over society. A new dawn has drawn a picture that can no longer be managed by those in power.

Agree

And a large part of this 'i think'
is because humanity lacks a goal.
To survive and be comfortable is fine.. but

[Pluto]

At the beginning of a Century was there a blanket of despair that had covered the earth. A new dawn had drawn a picture that could no longer be managed by those in power. To conceal the fact, a blanket of pain was thrown down over society as a political act of containment. Keeping people confused and in the dark as to what was really going on. Suspicion and death ran through the streets. Values came adrift and floated away. The exhibition attempts to project a space outside the blanket, as a kind of deprogrammed safe zone.

[Pluto]

At the start of the Century a blanket of despair covers the Earth. A new dawn has drawn a picture that can no longer be managed by those in power. In order to conceal this, a blanket of catastrophes has been thrown over society as a political act of containment. Keeping people confused and in the dark as to what is really going on. Values have come adrift and float away anchorless. The exhibition Zonder the Dust of Now attempts to project a space outside the blanket, as a kind of deprogrammed zone.


At the start of the Century a blanket of despair covers the earth. A new dawn has drawn a picture that can no longer be managed by those in power. In order to conceal this, a blanket of pain has been thrown over society as a political act of containment. Keeping people confused and in the dark as to what is really going on. Values have come adrift and float away anchorless. The exhibition Zonder the Dust of Now attempts to project a space outside the blanket, as a kind of deprogrammed zone.


At the start of the Century a culture of despair covers the earth. A new dawn has drawn a picture that can no longer be managed by those in power. In order to conceal this, a culture of pain has been thrown over society as a political act of containment. Keeping people confused and in the dark as to what is really going on. Values have come adrift and float away anchorless. The exhibition Zonder the Dust of Now attempts to project a space outside the culture, as a kind of deprogrammed zone.


At the start of the Century a blanket of despair covers the earth. A new dawn has drawn a picture that can no longer be managed by those in power. In order to conceal this, a blanket of pain has been thrown over society as a political act of containment. Values have come adrift and float away anchorless. Suspicion, death and destruction run through the streets. The exhibition Zonder the Dust of Now attempts to project a space outside the blanket, as a kind of deprogrammed zone.


At the start of the Century a blanket of despair covers the earth. A new dawn has drawn a picture that can no longer be managed by those in power. In order to conceal this, a blanket of pain has been thrown over society as a political act of containment. Keeping people confused and in the dark as to what is really going on. Values have come adrift and float away anchorless. Suspicion, death and destruction run through the streets of culture. The exhibition Zonder the Dust of Now attempts to project a space outside the blanket, as a kind of deprogrammed zone.


At the start of the Century a blanket of despair covered the earth. A new dawn had drawn a picture that could no longer be managed by those in power. In order to conceal this, a blanket of pain was thrown over society as a political act of containment. Keeping people confused and in the dark as to what was really going on. Values had come adrift and floated away anchorless. Suspicion, death and destruction ran through the streets of culture. The exhibition Zonder the Dust of Now attempts to project a space outside the blanket, as a kind of deprogrammed zone.

[Pluto]

At the start of the Century a blanket of despair covered the earth. A new dawn had drawn a picture that could no longer be managed by those in power. In order to conceal this, a blanket of pain had been thrown over society as a political act of containment. Keeping people confused and in the dark as to what was really going on. Values had come adrift and floated away anchorless. Suspicion, death and destruction ran through the streets of culture as veins through a body. The exhibition Zonder the Dust of Now attempts to project a space outside the blanket, as a kind of deprogrammed zone.

[Pluto]

Zonder the Dust of Now

At the start of the Century a blanket of despair covers the earth. A new dawn has drawn a picture that can no longer be managed by those in power. In order to conceal this fact, a blanket of pain has been thrown over society as a political act of containment. Keeping people confused and in the dark as to what is really going on. Values have come adrift and float away anchorless. Suspicion, destruction and death run through the streets of culture, as veins through a body. The future has stopped and the present is stuck in a perpetual past. The exhibition Zonder the Dust of Now attempts to project a space outside the blanket, as a kind of deprogrammed zone of becoming.

[Pluto]

a deprogrammed space of becoming

a deprogrammed space of ethicality (can a space be ethical as well as being deprogrammed?)