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ForCruxSake
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Greta

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Call her what you will
Expletives allowed
The one thing 'bout Greta
She'll always be proud

She won't follow the crowd
So she'll never be late
Another thing 'bout Greta
It's an anagram of 'great'

She'll fell you with knowledge
Storing facts that come her way
But the fiercest thing 'bout Greta
Is she must have her say

Her mum was writer
She must have been skint
The last thing 'bout Greta
Is she looks good in print
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Re: Poetry here.

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ForCruxSake wrote:
Greta wrote:
ForCruxSake wrote:
How do you do this so quickly? It's amazing. Like Poetry Impro.... Sheesh, now I look like I'm sucking up!... But it's amazing, what you did!

Have you heard of Abandoman? They're an Irish two man outfit that play the comedy circuit. They do Impro rap. They go out into the audience for suggestions and build a whole rap song around the suggestions. You could do this with poetry! Turn it into an art form... Better still, a performance money spinner! You could get members of the audience to have a short discussion about something and then turn that into poetry. My head is just spinning with what you could do with this?!!

Clearly, I've spent too long here today...
Mum was a writer and I have a knack. This skill has so far brought me zero dollars (and zero cents) in the last fifty years :)

I can only do it in print. I am not much good in person lol
I think all performance is a matter of practise. Many comics are comics because they are not that good at anything else and the majority start out below par and improve with time, if they have the nerve to stay with it. Actors improve the more work they get. You'd probably surprise yourself if you tried out a 'Spoken Word' night. Do you have those over there?
Like my ma, I'm better in print
I've tried in small ways but taken the hint
That when I open my mouth
My fortunes tend to run south.
'Tis where my feet usually reside
Should I indulge in pride.

Lacking in grace
With a horse's face,
Feeling all shivery
And a garbled delivery,
A tad behind the pace
So fame I don't chase
I'm ok right here in my place.

If you've an idea
How I could make a splash
With the written word
That could make me some cash
Then I'll be all ears
And ready to type
More of my Pam Ayers-like
Near-rhyming tripe :)
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ForCruxSake wrote:Call her what you will
Expletives allowed
The one thing 'bout Greta
She'll always be proud

She won't follow the crowd
So she'll never be late
Another thing 'bout Greta
It's an anagram of 'great'

She'll fell you with knowledge
Storing facts that come her way
But the fiercest thing 'bout Greta
Is she must have her say

Her mum was writer
She must have been skint
The last thing 'bout Greta
Is she looks good in print
Far too kind
And most refined
Mama mia, sacre bleu
He of the witty moniker
Can write verse too!

I didn't know I was so overbearing
Though I've been told so often, I must be hard of hearing.
Too often I say any thoughts that come my way
Better to read and save for another day.

Quality trumps quantity
(No pun intended)
Overdone constancy
Control is upended.

What I keep trying to say
In different ways
Every day
(Sorry, it can be tiresome, eh?)
Is that the universe is alive
And that ain't no jive
Powered by blind drive
To safety it does strive.

Some may call it equilibrium
From AI through to bacterium
From rocks to stars and planets and space
And now the alien human race.

I doubt this vast edifice of reality
Was for apes to twerk on reality TV
Like every other species
We are transitional beasties.
Where it all might go, nobody knows
Though some might say it's all just faeces.

In the end I'm optimistic
At least in the longer term
Though populations are ballistic
Life - it may still affirm.
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The Poetic Chat

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Greta wrote: If you've an idea
How I could make a splash
With the written word
That could make me some cash
Then I'll be all ears
And ready to type
More of my Pam Ayers-like
Near-rhyming tripe :)
I wish I could help you
Find cash for your words
Point you in a direction
To migrate with cash birds

But as is the way
With the rest of all folk
There's fierce competition
Finding work is no joke

All I can do
As you battle cash trials
Is take in your text
And pay you in smiles

:) :) :) :) :) :) :) :)
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Re: The Poetic Chat

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ForCruxSake wrote:
Greta wrote: If you've an idea
How I could make a splash
With the written word
That could make me some cash
Then I'll be all ears
And ready to type
More of my Pam Ayers-like
Near-rhyming tripe :)
I wish I could help you
Find cash for your words
Point you in a direction
To migrate with cash birds

But as is the way
With the rest of all folk
There's fierce competition
Finding work is no joke

All I can do
As you battle cash trials
Is take in your text
And pay you in smiles

:) :) :) :) :) :) :) :)
Thanks anyway, Crux
It was worth asking
I don't need extra bucks
I'm just multitasking.

It's one thing to have
Little gimmicks at hand,
But monetising and
Creating a brand ...
Well, I'm not so grand.
It's a game I can't stand
And have no command
With requests oh-so-bland
So Mammon be damned :)
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Re: Poetry here.

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the mainstream is a river that you are (in)
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Re: Poetry here.

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The mainstream is a river that we are in,
Its ripples madly addled.
Crushing conservatism, neurotic denial,
Enough to fill the river Nile -
Up shit creek without a paddle.
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Re: Poetry here.

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Greta wrote:The mainstream is a river that we are in,
Its ripples madly addled.
Crushing conservatism, neurotic denial,
Enough to fill the river Nile -
Up shit creek without a paddle.
Just one day's all I ask
With a lunch pack and flask
To have an adventure
In 'Little Miss Drencher'

Been a while since I rowed her
Dragged her out and just showed her
But today I'm feeling limber
I'll just drag out her timber

So now I'm sat in my boat
Wondering if she will float
With all things considered
She don't look so withered

We're both sat in the garage
But I'm feeling disparaged
For when I look for oarage
One seems lost in storage!

The one that I've found
Is lying on the ground
It's a bit of a state
That to fix is too late

Still, if I get to some water
Like I planned, like I ought'a
I can still have the day
To just coast or bob away

Then I look at my car
And know it won't go so far
Can I make the long journey
If I pull her on a gurney?

My dream's a nightmare
For how will I get there?!!
Things really seem bleak
I'm up (one) shit paddle without a creek
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I'm up shit creek without a paddle
How did I get here
What horrendous thing did I do
To deserve this
But then who or what would do such a thing
I'm saying that because of something bad I did back in time
I'm being punished for that, now
That's crazy and something I've created solely in my head
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Re: Poetry here.

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Pluto wrote:I'm up shit creek without a paddle
How did I get here
What horrendous thing did I do
To deserve this
But then who or what would do such a thing
I'm saying that because of something bad I did back in time
I'm being punished for that, now
That's crazy and something I've created solely in my head
Up shit creek, without a paddle?
Blaming yourself, your brain you will addle
Don't 'ogle' the problem, look for a clue
To find a solution is better for you!
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Re: Poetry here.

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Understand

Why is a star when reversed rats
and can love be so evol
You cry and wonder why
and yet aspire to a steeple
This thing that is of us
a thing which you must trust
A love beyond thine eye
more profound than you or i.
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Post by Walker »

Brilliant and fun!
Does it ever end in done?

Truth never smells like roses
Never smells like lavender washed in summer rain
Truth follows along like a pinch of pain
When sun retreats and drops the poses
With only the morning to gain
After nights of interrupted dozes
Far from the hour when hearts frozes
When rationality is lame
Truth is smelt by the noses
Sniffing words after emotions wane
Time can unleash or time can tame
Time follows wherever you goeses
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Very murky waters
he was involved in
or at least researching
a demented loner
he would trawl the internet
for info that might make him alright again
But it was always the same on the fringe crap
just once did he wish for some big news organisation to say the truth about what was going on but it never happened ever how could it
they were pillars of the system - the fourth estate trashed by trump jokingly but really they were of course a kind of buffer or moat between people and power
without the media on your side you were nothing the thing with recent events was a kind of pretend back and forth - it didn't matter who got in as long as you were on the side of power and not people
Who were the people though - totally gone lost confused
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Post by Walker »

Aww … Poor Pluto. :D

The boy looks outward and sees himself
The man looks within and sees truth

Who cares about rhyme, or form, or frame

Because Poetry is

Whatever I feel
Whatever I say
However, whenever
In any form I think I choose

:lol:
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Re: Poetry here.

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Pluto wrote:As eyes adjusted and focused someone pointed to the corner of the room
What is that he asked
A tall thin figure in silhouette stood on a chair against the wall motionless
Total silence filled the room
Then it spoke - sneetzer unperwist ald zo ceefers - it said
This made me literally laugh out loud. Couldn’t help it. It has suspense, it tells a story, it answers a question, and the nonsense passage carries a strange rhythm, all contained within the boundaries of the frame, of the form. In short, pretty good. In my opinion, a rhyming rhythm would simply add to the effect and move it towards brilliant, with some work. The seed of brilliance is there, in the last line, in the rhythm, in the music.
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